Wednesday, January 26, 2011

Rhyme Poem

I wondered if you could tell
by the way I grasped her
holding her out as if
I didn't care if she fell

I wondered if you knew
by the way I dug my nails
deeper still as if
I could end everything for you

I wondered if you saw
the warning
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3 comments:

  1. Sammie JoJanuary 26, 2011 at 1:10 PM

    ruby,
    i really like your way of rhyming the first and last line of every stanza-- it made the darker mood stand out more.
    but i really miss the "tiffany lin has a chin" poem!
    <3
    sammie

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  2. leila greenMarch 29, 2011 at 12:54 PM

    I really like this poem, it's so dark and creepy. But you seem to be sympathetic too. Like you are "wondering" if the person could have done something too...
    :)

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  3. FionaMay 15, 2011 at 7:48 PM

    oh my god.
    oh my god.
    this is so strong
    and mysterious
    I'm speechless

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